Tuesday, July 23, 2013

Punctuation?

shaking
the packet of seeds
asking, are you still alive?
Kiyoko Tokutomi

The way this haiku is punctuated, a person is asking the seeds a question. What if ---

shaking,
the packet of seeds asking --
are you still alive?

How does this shift your emotional response to the words?

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